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a star-glow  
connects their breaths -
a river path.  
     in lilac light  
     she forgets to sigh.
About 'Lilac':
This is a series of poems that are each the same idea translated into different poetry forms from different parts of the world.


About 'Lilac II':
Japanese style. This is a tanka. One of the main requirements for it is that each line/unit has a certain number of morae, which are a unit of speech smaller than syllables. [link] The pattern of morae per line/unit is 5-7-5-7-7.

As far as I could tell, tanka have far less rules than haiku, though are still supposed to be about nature and the seasons. They are apparently often written in Japanese as just one line, rather than as five. This would make a closer to traditional version of this poem be:

a star-glow connects their breaths - a river path. in lilac light she forgets to sigh.

I think I failed here entirely. This is way less about tangible reality than it's supposed to be… but as it was neither easy nor fun to write, I don't feel like trying again.


Lilac I: [link]
Lilac III: [link]
Lilac IV: [link]

~Obligatory post-DD update~
Oh my goodness guys. Oh wow. Thanks to the suggester, all who commented, just... wow. Was not expecting this in the slightest! Looks that I didn't "fail here entirely" after all. ^-^
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Given 2013-05-18
Lilac II - tanka by ~Atheshya is a beautiful tanka with imagery as serene as a midnight respite, says the suggester. ( Suggested by Concora and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner May 18, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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Atheshya Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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Atheshya Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! *drowns in emotes*
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconflyingheartsplz::blowkiss::iconflyingheartsplz:
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Karinta Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Student General Artist
Love.
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Atheshya Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks.
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AnnaLena250199 Featured By Owner May 18, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :squee:
Much deserved :hug:
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Atheshya Featured By Owner May 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! ...Ooh, pretty snake you are there. With pretty fractals.
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AnnaLena250199 Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You are very welcome :)
Haha :giggle: Thank you :heart:
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